Hardly
can you imagine this world changing. Everything would seem to be so “of course”.
However, life is always a change and we will face another change soon. Then,
what would be some changes that will occur in 21st century? In my opinion, common
marriage custom of marrying one person in a lifetime would change to marrying
more than one person as your will; need and willing of the people to study and
learn delicate skills would be more intensified.
To
start with, marrying more than one person in the lifetime would be expected as
common custom instead of marrying only one person. In modern society, majority
of the cultures have custom of marrying one person in one life. Unless the
partner has died or they have trouble with the partner’s relationship, majority
of the people maintain their relationships with the partner for their entire
life. However, as medicine technology develops, I think by the end of the 21st
century, people will be able to live for more than 100 years. I think, as now,
living for average 70 years and living with one partner for about 40 years is
quiet fair. But if the life span is extended, living with one partner for more
than 70 years might be quiet boring. Just the marriage customs have changes
from the ancient times when people marry at a very young age to now that people
marry later and later, I suspect that maybe marrying custom would again
gradually change to those that allow and permit more than one marriage in life.
Furthermore, I imagine that this kind of custom would be regulated as laws to
prevent many fundamental troublesome relationships in the family units. More
specifically, there would be trials or choices between the couple once in 30 or
40 years to “live or leave”. This kind of regulations and customs would allow
much more free relationship between married couple but also might bring side
effects of viewing the relationship as something so easy.
Secondly,
there would be only jobs that require delicate skills of the human such as
artists, professors. Nowadays, there are some jobs that don’t require people to
have high degree of knowledge or skills. Uneducated people can use their labor to
earn money. However in the future, those labor forces that require less
delicate skills such as clerk, factory-worker, street cleaner, secretaries with
simple works will entirely be replaced by the robots or computers. Then, with
these cheap and meticulous forces, human will only have the leftover jobs that
are limited to only human ability. For example, the artists who express human
emotions, studies dealing with humanities, languages which cannot be simply
stated and studied cannot be substituted by those computer forces. So,
imagining the future view, I think I would see only artists, musicians,
doctors, humanity professors, psychologists, engineers who have control over
the robot forces etc. If this change occurs, people would have to work harder
to find a way to get those jobs, and they have to work harder to do so. To be
more specific, the rate of university attendance might raised to higher than 90%,
and the competition for the job will be much more severe since there will be so
many highly educated people. Meanwhile, those who are unfortunately uneducated
or not provided with such artistic gifts might fall into deep frustration that
they would not be able to go on in that competition with the other people and
the robots.
In
conclusion, I suspect that there would be two major changes in this upcoming
100 years. Marrying more than one person in a life would be common marriage custom
and only jobs that require high skills, knowledge or artistic gifts would be
left over for the human and thus people would have to work harder to survive.
These changes may seem to be little awkward and unreasonable now. But who in
1900s would have suspected lives like this? Life always changes and no one
knows that this really can be the future by 2100.
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Nice essay :)
ReplyDeleteYour essay was overall very unique.
It was interesting to list marrying more than one person as a change in the 21st century!
I've never thought so before, but after reading your essay, I found your points quite supporting.
Your second choice was interesting, too.
A lot of students wrote down in their essay that people will become lazy with the development of technology, whereas you asserted that the need and willing of the people to study and learn delicate skills would be more intensified.
Overall, I liked your essay because it had unique ideas but also strong supporting details.
However, since it's a "TOEFL" essay, maybe it might be better to 'take out' some imagination out of your writing. The changes you listed are interesting, but they have a lot to discuss about.
I enjoyed your essay very much!
Thank you for your comment!
DeleteThank you for praising me for being unique and creative.
I adimit that there are many points that I have to improve too.
As you said, since it is a TOEFL essay, I should eliminate some of imaginative elements!
Again thank you foryour comment!
It's a great honor to make a comment of your essay.
ReplyDeleteYour first paragraph is really creative and interesting. Actually, in my view, it seems quite hard to bring out the idea of marriage as changes occur in this century. Most people, especially Koreans, have had pessimistic prejudice on second marriage or getting divorced. However, this essay can totally change their views based on concrete and logical reasons.
However, I personally think that your second paragraph is a bit banal compared to first paragraph. Most ideas in this paragraph have been already made by other professors or experts who study overall future.
Nevertheless, I really enjoy reading your well-rounded essay and expect that you may write better essays in the next time^^.
Thank you for your comment!
DeleteI am glad that I persuade you with my first point!
As you said, since many Koreans are very prejudied on second marriage, so I might have to improve my logics to more firmly support my point!
Also, I adimit that my second point is somehow banal. I might have to add some creative aspects to it.
Again, thank you for your comment :)
Liked your essay!
ReplyDeleteWell, I like unique stuff, and definitely your reasons were unique!
The first reason seemed quite appealing- and quite creative. Really, I could't have thought it myself; for one generally thinks inside the conventional terms in most things. Anyway, your supporting details seemed logical, for humans' life span is indeed getting longer. And it would be natural for people to get tired with their spouse, as they are already devorcing lots of the times.
The second reason was somewhat hard to understand; for, wouldn't there still be politicans and scientists? As the technoloy is developing, some 'people' develop those, don't they? Oh, and no offense, by the way.
Whatsoever, I enjoyed your article. Merci!